In today’s teaser excerpt, Axyl goes to visit some old friends. And by old friends, I mean people who testified against him and whom he would like to kill. Only problem, this all takes place two weeks after Axyl’s execution. People act funny when you’re supposed to be dead.
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Big Bruno’s Tattoos was off the main drag, in an old firehouse with brick floors in the truck bay. One corner had racks of tattoo flash and in the other corner was a couple couches. Some college kids sat there looking through flash books. On the back wall was a counter with a curtain behind it and from back there come the buzz of a tattoo gun. When I walked in, a woman stepped out and said, “Hey there. Can I help you?”
She was pasty white like Shona, but covered in tattoos. She woulda been pretty enough, except she had about a dozen things pierced through her face and she talked with a lisp from the stud in her tongue. As many nuts and bolts as a hardware store. Made me think fucking Shona wasn’t bad. Hell, I’d put a bag over tattoo girl’s head if I was gonna fuck her.
“Yeah, I’m here to see Scott. I think me and you talked on the phone.”
“You must be Axyl. I’m Monica. I’m Scott’s girl–I was going to say that I’m Scott’s girlfriend, but we got engaged two weeks ago. So I’m Scott’s fiancée.”
“Congratulations. Which of them is your engagement ring? The one in your nose?”
It was an asshole thing to say, but she laughed and flashed me a diamond on her finger. She leaned toward me over the counter and said, “So, you knew Scott in high school?”
“Yeah, we go way back. Knowed him almost twenty years.”
“What was he like back then?”
See how we was already buddies? Me and Scott’s fiancée having a little chat.
“He was a geek,” I said.
“Oh my god. I knew it. He won’t show me any pictures from back then. He says he doesn’t have any. You have to give me all the dirt on him, okay? Promise?”
“Yeah, sure.”
She grinned. “Let me go tell him you’re here.”

BuzzBuzzBuzz
A minute later, from behind the curtain, I heard Scott say, “Don’t fucking joke about that, Monica. You think that’s funny? Can you see I’m trying to work here?”
“I’m not joking. He said he was a friend of yours from high school. Is there a problem?”
“Yeah, some asshole is trying to mess with me and he’s going to get his ass kicked.”
I woulda loved to seen that, because Scott couldn’t fight his way out of a paper bag. I was always the muscle in that crowd. Him and Joel liked to talk shit in bars, but whenever some pissed off guy come over to shut them up, it was my job to stand up and scare him away.
The tattoo gun went quiet and then Scott pushed open the curtain and stepped around the counter. He said, “Which one of you fuckwads is calling yourself Axyl Witt?”
That was my first look at him since my trial. He looked about the same, a little heavier. His hair was less blond and he was starting to lose it in front. Had a ring through his nose like a bull.
Scott, though, he went from tough to pudding in the time it took him to figure out it was really me. He staggered back against the counter and knocked a styrofoam cup off. It popped open and chunks of ice scattered all over the floor. Reminded me of how Jenny McClure dropped her Big Gulp cup after I shot her boyfriend.
I stepped up and grabbed Scott, hugged him like he was my long lost brother. Like I wanted to break his fucking back. I squeezed him so hard, I felt his heart pounding against me, felt when his knees went weak and I was actually holding him up.
Red, I really love this.
Axyl is such a brilliant character. I can’t believe I’m fond of such an evil bastard.
The humor is great, “…he went from tough to pudding….” I just love it.
Wow, Red, this is awesome! I loved it. I was really “there.” Very polished and yet natural-sounding, too. I could picture everything happening. I can’t wait to read the whole book.
Ok, I’m seriously hooked on Axyl now. The voice is so authentic and unapologetically violent. 😀
*swoon*
Hmmm. Maybe next time I’ll actually a post an excerpt in which he’s being charming and nice…ya know, if I can find one.
He sure sounds like he means business no doubt about that.
I’m hooked. Brilliant. So sexy…love bad boys.
I love Axyl! He’s so awesome. 😀
Uh – that was me. (Too may usernames.)
I’m now totally confused as to whether my compliments went through. I think wordpress is rejecting the Axyl love. I love Axyl! So there, wordpress!
Ooooh Axyl…. What can I say about Axyl? The voice is so flawless, so fluid, and Axyl is just an incredible character. He is a piece of work and that’s why he is so fracking awesome. brilliant job, hon!
What’s weird, Para, is that apparently WordPress remembers which Alien/Monster avatar you’re supposed to have. It held your comment for moderation, but it gave you the same avatar. Hmmm…
Perhaps it associates my red blob monster with my IP. (THIS IP IS EVIL. WE SHALL DEPICT IT AS AN ANGRY BLOB.)
OK, now I see why people like him. LOVE the bit about the engagement ring. Brava!
Axyl. This was my first time to read Axyl!
Red, you have more teasers on this guy? He’s just so bad! :))
(Get well soon for your little kitteh too!)
This is great stuff–your writing is really fast-paced and keeps me interested. I can’t wait to read more about Axyl–he cracks me up. (hmm…maybe this says a lot about me, lol….)
I’m biased because I’ve read the whole thing, but I’d like to point out to everyone that like with another Teaser I read today, Bryn’s ability to set time and place through dialogue is brilliant. Without any set up, I’d know almost exactly where I when I was, just with this: “Which one of you fuckwads is calling yourself Axyl Witt?”
Seriously, the voice reads SO authentic. It’s an amazing gift you have.
The voice in this is so very, very good. I want more Axyl!
Wow. Thanks for all the love, people. I think if you click on the “Axyl Witt is a bad motherfucker” tag, you’ll find the other teaser from this book. 😉
All right. You teased with a little the other day and now I’m teased again. lol. I gotta know what happens.
Wow this is really good. I like Axyl already. I can’t wait to read more of this!
Wow, as Renee Zellweger (sp?) would say, you had me at hello! I was totally hooked just from your paragraph set-up about the scene. Excellent voice!
I love this book!
But you knew that already.
I know you do, but I still like hearing it. 😀